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Women can be cold and cruel
Say things that wound you through and through
Break your heart in a million pieces
And expect you to come back for more

They can cut you to the core
And leave you bleeding on the floor
Tear your insides out
And just simply walk away

Please, baby give me a break
I will never cause your heart to ache
I promise to be gentle with you
And I will never walk away

I will love you till you trust me
Then I will love you some more
I will love you till you feel safe
Till you aren’t afraid anymore

I will love you till you are happy again
I want to see a smile light your eyes and then
I will keep on loving you
I will keep on loving you
:iconnymphomaniac69:

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:icontwilightpoetess:
Awww, this is exceptionally sweet. I love the rhyme scheme, it's beautifully done, creating a message that I won't soon forget.

However, a few grammatical/spelling errors.

"I will love you till your are happy again"

The 'your are' is very out of place here. I think you mean, "til you are", yes?

Other than that, nicely done!

--
I've always known that I'd be trapped;
the world outside no longer shows.
And here, within this dream, I'm caught...
the Lady of the Blackened Rose.


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:iconnymphomaniac69:
Thanks for the critique. I appreciate your point of view and opinion. OF course, you are right, nasty little typo demons! Thanks for the correction! I almost left the mistake to add a little "character" but once you pointed it out to me, it stuck out like a sore thumb!
:iconromantic-knight:
This is truely one of your best yet. I will always
love the way you see things from outside the box. Which
to people like me that is inside the box. I will give
you all the trust in the world. And i hope that your
man does too. If not look me up.
:iconnymphomaniac69:
Thanks. I'm glad that you like it. I do try to see things from a fresh perspective. I think that I am happy with my man and will not be looking anyone up, sorry.

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